Doliente Estrechar

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Atheist Angel

- - - Doliente Estrechar
"Go fuck yourself with something hard and sandpapery "

&. ALIAS: None

&. AGE: Nineteen

&. GENDER: male

&. SEXUALITY: bisexual

&. STATUS: Single




☆ Calm
☆ Loyal
☆ Firm
☆ Determined
☆ Serious



★ Boastful
★ Stubborn
★ Irrational
★ Closet minded
★ Sarcastic




✓ Perfection
✓ Winning
✓ Blood
✓ Kink
✓ Boasting




✕ Losing
✕ Imperfection
✕ Being Underestimated
✕ Loud Noises
✕ Naivety




♡ Prefers guys
♡ Cant stand the thought of having ghouls
♡ Has a disdain for Fae




» Leather handcuffs
» Tanto

• Physical Prowess: average (2),
  
• Magical Affinity: average (2),
  
• Blood Consumption: average (2)
  

Abilities:
Doliente has ability to generate and propel charges of electricity ranging from minor to fatal voltage. Doliente has extensive control over his ability. He is able to adjust the strength and power of the electricity he generates, such as creating a small spark which causes a minor electric shock, a medium-level bolt which stuns or produces concussive force and a powerful surge which can kill. Estrechar is not immune to the electricity he creates, and being wet can turn his ability against him.

Primary Usage: Doliente uses this ability offensively in order to help him incapacitate his victims. He uses his ability in combination with physical combat. Doliente can also create ball lightning. After creating it, he can immediately release it, charge it for more powerful bursts, or simply use it to intimidate. He can also fire blasts of sheet lightning and ribbon lightning in battle. He is able to hone his finesse for sharpshooting, firing small pinpoint but powerful lightning bolts that can shatter glass and cause objects to catch fire. He has enough control over the intensity of his lightning to merely knock his opponent unconscious but has to stretch himself in order to fire fatal blasts. However being only a lesser a vampire his magic is inferior to noble’s as well as this his magic is unspecialized meaning he is at a weakness against experienced magus, however his balanced stats means he has no area's where he completely fails.



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I, FACE, hereby agree to have read and abide the rule set forth by the staff. By signing this, I completely understand the reason behind GM's rating and will also to take any and all liability for my actions.

[Camby]

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First, your three icons should be matching, and there should be a space between each.

You also changed the spacing between your first couple of stats for some reason and just left it? Put it back.

For your dark qualities: Boastful, Arrogant, and Prideful are all based off of the same negative quality of him being full of himself. Delete two of them and tell us two other negative qualities about him.

Also, could you reword this sentence: "Estrechar is also able to levitate her ball lightning."? It's hard to read/understand for me.

Lastly, acknowledge that your character is average in everything. No matter how much control and finesse in you express that he has over his electric aeromancy in his profile, he's no prodigy. He's just well rounded, jack of all trades, master of none. Alright?

-Camby

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Wallah

[Camby]

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Thanks for the changes. You didn't fix the spacing in between the first couple of stats, though. Fix it.

Also, I'd suggest taking your personal compendium into Word and just ironing out the spelling errors. That's about it.

-Camby

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Ok this should be better

[Camby]

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You still didn't fix the spacing at the top of your profile. Take a look at this one for the coding reference.

-Camby

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Fixified

[Camby]

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We, the staff, do not feel you hold the writing standard we hope to hold here at BGM. There are plenty of other wonderful, less advanced fantasy role plays who would likely love to have you and your characters. We wish you luck in searching the RPG-Directory to find them.

Thank you for your interest in BGM.

-Camby